I would talk to you of beauty

[addy]

I really like this piece, questions on form aside. I'm a big fan of the images you used. i found your juxtapositions vivid and highly effective

I Would Talk to You of Beauty

I would talk to you of beauty; no more to spew out bile and spite. agree with Phil that a comma is better, since "bile and spite" is so arresting
What glory to my eye, green fields, all starry topped in yellow trim.
And  there, the poppy, clustered red:
remember him, remember him. like it so far

I would talk to you of beauty; not of the choking  guilty men.
But of the joy of  a high  grown tree, all lichen hosed with glossy  crown!
Though scarred the  bark, and worn the bough,
where ropes of justice once hung down.

I would talk to you of beauty, of  seas aglow  with  nuclear blue.
Foamed irridescence "foamed irridescence" struck me as a bit unwieldy and vague, but that's just personal taste,  hyaline  white, comes fast and fluid to the shore,
to sink in sands of  shingle bright,
that buries deep the stains of war.

I would talk to you of beauty, of peaks thrust though the azure  air.
Still frosted in the summer light, ablaze when days fall in their shade.
Steep granite  pecked by puny pitons;
failed fixes by the  fallen  made.

I would talk to you of beauty, that  truth which everywhere  is seen.  I like the sentiment, but maybe this line could stand to be stronger
The lifting light of mornings new, the gentle bidding of each night.
When dreams will show you all of beauty....
whilst words, though chosen, only might.. Beautiful. Don't think you even need to get fancy with the punctuation

  Tectak 2011


Originally published and pre-mauled in another place but edited further.
S1 Poppy fields of Flanders
S2 Lillooets hanging tree
S3 Dunkirk landing
S4 K2. The deadliest Mountain

Written in thoughts of a sign in a beautiful part of a Polish forest declaring that here was a site of a mass execution. There are many such examples of surface beauty hiding ugly pasts.