Tectak...I made a few slight edits while I tinkered with the thing (and missed your post)...Thanks for the comments. I killed mute entirely because it's sort of assumed by the previous stanza. I'll tinker some more. I think you make some valid points about what is needed. I'm a slow editor though so it may take time for me to get to it.
Thank you though for all the feedback. It is much appreciated.
Best,
Todd
Oh and I wasn't sure about vintage (that actually crossed my mind) I liked the vaporization of distiling but do agree that vintage is not concerned with purity but fermentation. Most of the pain is finding the exact word...so, that will likely shift in a future edit.
Thank you though for all the feedback. It is much appreciated.
Best,
Todd
Oh and I wasn't sure about vintage (that actually crossed my mind) I liked the vaporization of distiling but do agree that vintage is not concerned with purity but fermentation. Most of the pain is finding the exact word...so, that will likely shift in a future edit.
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