05-30-2012, 11:04 AM
Oooh, this one has rather epic themes to it.
I think the others already pointed out the most critical points of critique, so really I have hardly anything to add
... only that since the POV (and the entire scene) clearly changes then perhaps the two parts should be delineated as part one and two of the poem or something. But I suppose that is just me being too strict 
Thanks, enjoyed the read
I think the others already pointed out the most critical points of critique, so really I have hardly anything to add
... only that since the POV (and the entire scene) clearly changes then perhaps the two parts should be delineated as part one and two of the poem or something. But I suppose that is just me being too strict Thanks, enjoyed the read
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?