it screams nostalgia, the edit in the 4th is great. it flows much better. the overall feel of the poem is affected by it (in a good way) much more now because of the fact though i wasn't sure about a couple of the word changes but that's just my preference i think. all in all a really good edit
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A father dies. - by tectak - 05-22-2012, 09:58 PM
RE: A father dies. - by billy - 05-23-2012, 05:58 AM
RE: A father dies. - by abu nuwas - 05-23-2012, 08:08 AM
RE: A father dies. - by tectak - 05-23-2012, 08:15 AM
RE: A father dies. - by billy - 05-23-2012, 11:35 AM
RE: A father dies. - by tectak - 05-23-2012, 06:28 PM
RE: A father dies. - by tectak - 05-25-2012, 04:44 PM
RE: A father dies. - by addy - 05-23-2012, 11:58 AM
RE: A father dies. - by billy - 05-24-2012, 11:27 AM
RE: A father dies. - by Philatone - 05-24-2012, 01:59 PM
RE: A father dies. - by tectak - 05-24-2012, 05:30 PM
RE: A father dies. - by Erthona - 05-24-2012, 04:11 PM
RE: A father dies. - by billy - 05-26-2012, 07:51 AM
RE: A father dies. - by billy - 05-28-2012, 12:58 PM
RE: A father dies. - by Philatone - 05-30-2012, 12:18 PM
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