05-24-2012, 10:31 PM
I follow this pretty well until "Tin bowl ". I'm guessing this has something to do with boot camp in the army, but the reference to Tin Bowl, and pretty much everything after it I am lost on.
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"The snip snip snip buggers up the meter of the next line so"
I' m not sure one can mess of that which is non-existent, although I get the point.
I think it needs a few extra syllables. Such as
"I succumb to the calming
"snip-snip-snip,"
of the sharp steel blades
that dance, and coldly clip
my receding hairline."
Dale
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"The snip snip snip buggers up the meter of the next line so"
I' m not sure one can mess of that which is non-existent, although I get the point.
I think it needs a few extra syllables. Such as
"I succumb to the calming
"snip-snip-snip,"
of the sharp steel blades
that dance, and coldly clip
my receding hairline."
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.