A father dies.

[tectak]

I thought it quite moving, the meter perfect, and I can't think of a word to say of helpful crit. So - - - - - -

.....and what more could I ask for?
Thanks, abu, for your restraint and tact From you that is faint praise but I take it where I can get it these days.
Best,
Tectak

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after breakie the rhyme scheme is spot on.

I was probably editing it as you ate your black pudding and chips (you did say brekkie?). I can wait. I never eat on an empty stomach.....or crit.
Best,
Tectak