Figure
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there's not a lot to give feedback on Big Grin

not sure the use of light twice in such a short is wise as you want all words to count.
i like it but i think you need one more line as a transition from the figure to the 1st person.

thanks for your 1st poem.
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Messages In This Thread
Figure - by KDT - 05-22-2012, 02:47 PM
RE: Figure - by billy - 05-22-2012, 03:03 PM
RE: Figure - by KDT - 05-22-2012, 03:06 PM
RE: Figure - by billy - 05-22-2012, 03:09 PM
RE: Figure - by tectak - 05-22-2012, 03:10 PM
RE: Figure - by addy - 05-22-2012, 03:20 PM
RE: Figure - by Philatone - 05-24-2012, 01:46 PM
RE: Figure - by Erthona - 05-24-2012, 04:32 PM
RE: Figure - by Leanne - 05-27-2012, 05:31 AM
RE: Figure - by Arachne - 05-30-2012, 02:28 AM



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