The Lion Speaks Tonight

[billy]

i feel a series coming on.

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In my teeth there lingers taste and craving drools the hidden trail. i had a ponder as to whether the drool part works and it did. that fact the opening line engaged me so made it all the better.
Come by and softly follow me.
The night is closer than you know, breathe deep my brothers; eye my tail,
let twilight wisdom lead we three.

Hush now, hush! The scents of life will tempt you sorely. Kill your speed;
come near and slowly stalk with me.
The eyes of many, ears of all, this way we brothers will succeed.
Be still now, look and you will see.

There, in olive-tangled shade, an outline shivers in my eye; i think this is a glorious line. shiver could being multi layered; cold, scared, heat haze or more than one of these.
stand stiff and look to where I stare.
Make not a whimper, not a sound, not a breath nor yet a sigh!
Hold still as death, for life prepare. i like this as well. it's one of those you can reverse and it still works.

Can you hear the heart within? And can you feel the slide of breath?
Come with me in your wild mind’s eye.
Wait for my sign, a change unseen, yet you will know the call to death.
Ready now…together…FLY! i only just now noticed it had end rhymes. so they must be working okay.

In my teeth the warm blood surges, washing through my craving ache. in or passed my teeth?
Close enough, no closer be!
Though brothers still, beware of me. In passion, bonds of siblings break
And throneless Kings come we….. i


Tectak

2006

One of a series of anthropomorphic efforts. See the Camel. Others wll follow unless advised otherwise! ( Oh no....not ANOTHER one)

so it is part of a series

i found this one more engrossing. the rhythm of it worked well with the tale. i'm assume these bro's were kicked out of the pride because they got to big? (i've seen the nat geo )
i'm not sure if this form has a name but in this piece it worked really well.
in retrospect. the camel's song needs bringing up to this level work, and no i don't know how,

ps, the titles are are a bit cheesy

thanks for the read.