05-14-2012, 01:46 PM
If you don't think this poem deserves weighty consideration "poetry for fun" might be a more appropriate section.
(05-13-2012, 09:13 AM)Erthona Wrote: (I do embrace what I disdain)Overall I like this poem. It's amusing in a brittle way, with some elegant lines which convey a cynicism about auteurs and modern attitudes to art quite well. All critique is JMHO. Thanks for the read.
Not everything pedestrian rises above
the prosaic and will profundity embrace
simply because it is imaged in verse Could a comma go here?
trading a suit of plain cloth for one of lace. Do you need "plain"? It feels like a needless adjective.
Nor can poetry transmogrify the Auteur Should "auteur" be capitalised?
who with bland nib of it did writ— I don't get this line. With bland nib of what? Is the internal rhyme worth sacrificing cohesion for?
when with palsied brain he did conceive—
turn from the dullard into the sharpest wit. The syntax here feels off. Shouldn't it be "turned"?
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe