Poetry is no Alchemist

[Erthona]

Hi Billy,

Thanks for the read.

Probably, yes, it needs about three commas, but I left them off to see if anyone wanted them added back, as everyone always wants them removed
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oh! one more nit; are both 'the's' needed on the last line.?

I think they both need direct articles to balance the sentence, plus it makes dullard an attribute rather than an inherent quality.

Thanks again,

Dale
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