Loss

[Indie]

on one line you say 'my love' yet you lost more than one.
line 3 could be tightened up by removing the 'and'
the last line of the 2nd stanza feels too cliche.

other than that i think it's a strong piece. i asked myself were the sons soldiers of hunters and could only think them soldiers. because all of them were lost. i'm still at a loss as to why the capped 'and' but i've already mentioned that and i know it's the writers choice.

i read it three or four times and enjoyed more on each read.
nicely done.

thanks for the read.

ps. while at times it's very wordy, it's one of those cheeky buggers where wordy works.

Thanks