05-09-2012, 10:00 AM
That's fine, but I think you misunderstand, you need not remove anything, just use the correct tense. This is how it would be all in past tense.
My eyes leaked starlight, and glistened unseen
Against your skin, I kissed the memory of your ankle
Took a shaky breath, and let go.
or present tense
My eyes leaking starlight, glistening unseen
Against your skin, I kiss the memory of your ankle
Take a shaky breath, and let go.
Dale
My eyes leaked starlight, and glistened unseen
Against your skin, I kissed the memory of your ankle
Took a shaky breath, and let go.
or present tense
My eyes leaking starlight, glistening unseen
Against your skin, I kiss the memory of your ankle
Take a shaky breath, and let go.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.