God can see

[Leanne]

Good morning, or whatever it is in your part of the world... because I'm coming into this a bit late, I'm only going to look at V3 and I'm not reading any other comments beforehand, so forgive me if I say the same as others

God can see, God can see...
The more subtle acts unholy. -- for the sake of rhythm, you might consider "acts subtle and unholy" -- "more" doesn't really add anything.
Those elements of all life -- again, "all" is redundant, just saying "life" gives you a blanket term
Not condemned particularly by
Holy bible; Connected nonetheless. -- connected to what? To each other? To acts condemned?


Having broken toy 'Made in China', -- the grammar here is distracting, is there a reason not to say "his toy"?
the child struggles to guage -- gauge
A time to press Mommy, unscathed


As the plates are wiped, tucked away -- removing "as" would give you a stronger line, even "The plates are wiped and tucked away"
And the TV roars stubborn backing -- I'd remove "and"
Of our nation's political pawns -- "political pawns" is a cliche
Unquestionably of course; it's war -- a colon would serve better than a semi-colon -- also, "unquestioning" might work better than "unquestionably", and "of course" is your own judgment that doesn't really have a place here
far away.


And the Mexican farmer's labour produce; -- a comma instead, perhaps
Somalian child's rice-
Casually fills our kitchen bin -- "casually" doesn't need to be stated, the reader can infer this


The news-programme's scan settles
Mommy; "thank God it wasn't bad news!"
Leaves her open to attack-
Timmy takes opportunity to win -- leaving out an article here makes the grammar very awkward and forced -- you might just try "Timmy takes the chance to win", which also makes the alliteration less obtrusive
Another affordable G. I. Joe clone. -- would you consider "one more" instead of "another"?

I'm afraid I'm missing the irony here -- you start off with God is watching, then end up with no consequence except a spoiled child milking his mother out of another couple of dollars, so there's no real connection between the beginning and ending of the poem. If you want God to be the omniscient, chalking up incidents on naughty-v-nice list, then you need to make God present throughout the poem OR you need to add another stanza to bookend with the first to bring God back into the picture. I don't get any sense that the people being watched and judged are particularly religious or hypocritical, just regular working class being manipulated by the media -- so you could portray the family themselves as pawns in a game between God (who probably won't make his end move until quite a bit later on, after they're dead) and the evil media/politicians.

I think I see what you're trying to do here, you just need to make the poem more consistent with your ideas and focus on one single point rather than jumping around a bit too much as you do here.

Hope that helps