11:10am

[heslopian]

Thanks for the feedback, Indie L2 and L3 were written first and were intended for a much different, longer poem, hence the clash in tone. I may use them again if that other poem I had in mind makes itself clearer.

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sorry for getting here late

if i read it as a piece of boredom it works really well; a snapshot of boredom, sleep late rise later with nothing to do.
i think it's worth expanding it though. i don't have any nits as such, i'd just like to see more of it.
thanks for the read.

Thanks for the feedback, Bilbo