04-25-2012, 04:20 AM
Regardless the question I still don't know the answer. You've said this isn't in any way a poem. Could you please tell me why? I'd find it helpful to know your reasoning so I might apply it to my next piece. In your original comment you implied you saw it as a story, not a poem, hence my comment about narratives.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe