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[Philatone]

When years together seemed a promise made,..like the opening, already conveys a sense of doubt
No more than that, though truthfully, well meant;
I went alone, you never knew, into a quiet darkened room
And cried with such an anguished mind,...in some ways, I felt this and line below could have been combined, cutting some words out from both
For so much love welled up in me that I was taken by the swell.
The moment still is fresh today; but now by time and circumstance...."today; but now by time" I understand the meaning, and it does work, but I stumbled specifically over these words
I find you look the other way. A greater pain there cannot be,...great line, very understandable
Unless in your eyes I have changed, and greater your heart's angst than mine.
But still I will be loving you, the years are not a changeling's sword,
Nor passing time a slipping vow, nor echoes promises that fade....from this point on, I really have nothing to say. the writing is strong, the sentiments clear. it's great.
Your old grey head, your weakened frame, your sleeping days in sun-bright rooms
Are wrapped in precious overlays of memories of all those days
When years together seemed a promise made. And I have kept my word.
Tectak
2012

though it is little, I hope some of this can be of use