Asylum

[Philatone]

hey there!
some thoughts that I hope can be useful

He lets me...really like this as an intro; open to many interpretations and keeps the poem intriguing

inside his skin.
And I wear him,
like a jacket
like a star seed
like a brine....of this triplet of images, I really prefered two: the "jacket" and the "brine"

Seeking out darkness...interesting how, by uniting, one turns from the light
we collide: ..works well with that theme of melding into one
I push into tenderness,
slinky stiletto DNA,...can't explain at the moment, but I liked the image. DNA, with its helix structure, goes well with the sense of two pieces acting together as one. also, reiterates that theme of digging into things, what with DNA inside of cells. considered removing the comma from after "tenderness" so the speaker could actually "push" that "slinky stiletto DNA" into the tenderness.
hanging secrets from quarried bones
and knitting whispers ...again, ties with DNA and uniting because of "knitting"
into awe....here, I would have preferred something more concrete. personal style; take with salt

Then he sheds,
and we begin again....i like how the ending of one skin leads to another process. goes well with a number of the themes presented

just some thoughts. enjoyed the read