04-18-2012, 10:28 AM
Just a couple of points;
As novice poets it is often better to be less mean than this when telling t he story
Make it as clear as you can, don't go for poetryjust yet. The main thing is to get it down on the paper in a way that can read and understood with clarity.
Try to make it read smoothly. As it is, i feel like i'm stopping to much in order to try and work things out
As novice poets it is often better to be less mean than this when telling t he story
Make it as clear as you can, don't go for poetryjust yet. The main thing is to get it down on the paper in a way that can read and understood with clarity.
Try to make it read smoothly. As it is, i feel like i'm stopping to much in order to try and work things out