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(adult themes) If I
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04-16-2012, 06:13 AM
"If I put a gun to my head and pull" is not only a perfectly acceptable poetic line, it's got more emotion and a little less (just a little) trite going on. As far as the poem goes, I'd try sticking to basic, physical nouns and leaving out all past/future/self references. Try it.
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(adult themes) If I - by Chaotic Body - 04-16-2012, 04:30 AM
RE: (adult, dark, suicide) If I - by tectak - 04-16-2012, 05:12 AM
RE: (adult, dark, suicide) If I - by Chaotic Body - 04-16-2012, 05:38 AM
RE: (adult, dark, suicide) If I - by tectak - 04-16-2012, 07:21 AM
RE: (adult, dark, suicide) If I - by addy - 04-16-2012, 12:40 PM
RE: (adult, dark, suicide) If I - by Chaotic Body - 04-16-2012, 09:29 PM
RE: (adult, dark, suicide) If I - by billy - 04-17-2012, 10:41 AM
RE: (adult, dark, suicide) If I - by addy - 04-18-2012, 11:29 AM
RE: (adult themes) If I - by rayheinrich - 04-16-2012, 06:13 AM
RE: (adult themes) If I - by rayheinrich - 04-16-2012, 07:45 AM
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