Do you feel it?

[Chaotic Body]

i'm probably way off base with my thoughts, but I hope some of them can be of use. Initially, I saw the "cut" as more physical, but as the poem progresses it seems to have a much stronger emotional impact.

Thanks, I tried to address all those points

I'm not sure how that emotional impact could be built

I didn't intend a LOT of this haha! I think definitely the cutting is something I knew is a gateway metaphor for the rest. I can see the reader coming back and questioning the first stanza seriously a second read..

I'm worried about the ammunition part. But I don't think I can chop and change orders of words very well in this style of writing, I want so say with that line:

"people using weaknesses to bring down others (socially)"

..but the message is being confused with the professional side, I liked the idea of a double meaning. Particularly this checkout line scenario.. workers could be people of any age..