04-15-2012, 03:01 AM
v3.1 (changed word on L10 and end of last line. possibly this ties it up)
Cut, do you feel it?
If another feels
How would you know?
Perhaps, an electric circuit
Whereby no pain, just.. switch
Spoken, the mind is happy
Professionals hooked on regular responses:
Invested in, mused or returned a hello.
Adult children working a suicide line;
Competing with criminals: digging up murder cases,
Convincing the victim he's still alive.
Spoken, the mind is happy
To converse in unique tones each of us:
The mind alien natured to voice; to cunning
Blissfully unaware, each of us
And bound to treat brain's self, one's face-
The value we see with society's eyes.
v3.0 (still working on getting something to connect through it all,
decided to go a different direction to highlight the competition L9-11, maybe 'can still breathe' ?)
Cut, do you feel it?
If another feels
How would you know?
Perhaps, an electric circuit
Whereby no pain, just.. switch
Spoken, the mind is happy
Professionals hooked on regular responses:
Invested in, mused or returned a hello.
Adult children working a suicide line;
Competing with criminals: digging up shooting cases,
Convincing the victim he's still alive.
Spoken, the mind is happy
To converse in unique tones each of us:
The mind alien natured to voice; to cunning
Blissfully unaware, each of us
And bound to treat brain's self, one's face-
The value we see with our own eyes.
v2.0 (reworked the general message, clarity, works better I think)
Cut, do you feel it?
If another felt it
How would you know it feels?
Perhaps, an electric circuit
Whereby no pain, just.. reroute
Spoken, the mind is happy
Professionals hooked on regular validation-
Quipped, reversed or returned.
Adult children working a checkout line:
Competition-members, alert for attackers,
Whose leaked ammunition taken, fired.
Spoken, the mind is happy
To converse in unique tones each of us:
The mind is alien natured to voice
Blissfully unaware, each of us
And bound to value brain's self, one's face
A child in all life's scupperings.
(end)
v1.0 Original
Cut, do you feel it?
If another feels it
How would you know?
Perhaps, an electric circuit
And there is no pain just, reaction
Spoken the mind is happy
Children with addictions of regular validation-
Quipped, reversed or just returned-
Adult children operating a service.
Competition-members, sifting for attackers
Shooting with ammunition leaked.
Spoken the mind is happy
To converse in such diverged tones each of us
The mind is alien natured to all conversation
Blissfully unaware, each of us
And bound to value oneself, one's brain
A simple child with arising challenge.
(end)
Hmm just exploring putting my recent philosophy into writing here
Interested to hear if it flies with you.
Cut, do you feel it?
If another feels
How would you know?
Perhaps, an electric circuit
Whereby no pain, just.. switch
Spoken, the mind is happy
Professionals hooked on regular responses:
Invested in, mused or returned a hello.
Adult children working a suicide line;
Competing with criminals: digging up murder cases,
Convincing the victim he's still alive.
Spoken, the mind is happy
To converse in unique tones each of us:
The mind alien natured to voice; to cunning
Blissfully unaware, each of us
And bound to treat brain's self, one's face-
The value we see with society's eyes.
v3.0 (still working on getting something to connect through it all,
decided to go a different direction to highlight the competition L9-11, maybe 'can still breathe' ?)
Cut, do you feel it?
If another feels
How would you know?
Perhaps, an electric circuit
Whereby no pain, just.. switch
Spoken, the mind is happy
Professionals hooked on regular responses:
Invested in, mused or returned a hello.
Adult children working a suicide line;
Competing with criminals: digging up shooting cases,
Convincing the victim he's still alive.
Spoken, the mind is happy
To converse in unique tones each of us:
The mind alien natured to voice; to cunning
Blissfully unaware, each of us
And bound to treat brain's self, one's face-
The value we see with our own eyes.
v2.0 (reworked the general message, clarity, works better I think)
Cut, do you feel it?
If another felt it
How would you know it feels?
Perhaps, an electric circuit
Whereby no pain, just.. reroute
Spoken, the mind is happy
Professionals hooked on regular validation-
Quipped, reversed or returned.
Adult children working a checkout line:
Competition-members, alert for attackers,
Whose leaked ammunition taken, fired.
Spoken, the mind is happy
To converse in unique tones each of us:
The mind is alien natured to voice
Blissfully unaware, each of us
And bound to value brain's self, one's face
A child in all life's scupperings.
(end)
v1.0 Original
Cut, do you feel it?
If another feels it
How would you know?
Perhaps, an electric circuit
And there is no pain just, reaction
Spoken the mind is happy
Children with addictions of regular validation-
Quipped, reversed or just returned-
Adult children operating a service.
Competition-members, sifting for attackers
Shooting with ammunition leaked.
Spoken the mind is happy
To converse in such diverged tones each of us
The mind is alien natured to all conversation
Blissfully unaware, each of us
And bound to value oneself, one's brain
A simple child with arising challenge.
(end)
Hmm just exploring putting my recent philosophy into writing here
Interested to hear if it flies with you.