gestalts

[tectak]

I will take on board your comments an probably drop the flower cliche. It is from an older poem of mine written in my youth but never completed.
Best,
Tectak

Take heart you might yet save the flower image yet still not mention it as a simile something like this!!

My love. She will die wilted in my mind, like yesterday's beauty a stem
In the shrivelled remains of tomorrow's memories

just rework it make it fade but keep the image it was there.
Thanks for this BUT you've got to say "like a flower" early on in the extended metaphor or "beauty a stem" is obscure.
Best,
Tectak