gestalts

[tectak]

Where is Fritz Pearls when you need him, that chain smoking little hobgoblin!

A nice juxtaposition of the poetic and the objective comment lines, despite the fact that it weakens the poem. This has great limbs, but the body appears dead. Definitely some great lines here, mostly the first line of each pair.

If I had to pick one

"Body imperfect strains to pace that part of me which youth recalls."
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This one is particularly funny

"I am saddenened by the plight of others, crying tears of empathy."

Of course I don't know what the word "saddenened" means.

Interesting reference to Paul at the beginning, although I am not sure what it has to do with...

Dale

No one ever needed Fritz....and according to his expressed outlook he needed no one. In many ways he was his own art. Gestaltism was its own reward and was possibly the first placebo effect demonstrated as a "cure" for psychologically worrying conditions. I was also total bollocks because the body cerebral uses the placebo effect continually......which is what this piece is all about.
Sadenenened is another variation on saddenened not in common use. It is also a typo.
You are much better when wde awake

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another word i had to look up, i thought gestalt was about seeing shapes within.

i found it was also to do why psychiatry.
the couplets worked really well in that they held their own completeness. most of the lines are worth a 2nd and 3rd read. the last couplet feels tagged on and unnecessary, its also cliche. i just read it again and there is so much to like;
Body imperfect strains to pace that part of me which youth recalls.is most excellent.

the line lengths feels perfect. the 'rage' ate the end makes me want to add something and feels comfortable with the rest of the poem.
apart from the last couple i see no nits apart from a spelling mistake already mentioned.

thanks for the read. wish i could have been of more use.

Thanks Billy.
In a very real sense this piece has failed because I was trying to express what I and many others (surely?) see as a given. If it were not for the subconscious "processing per ponder" having a time out we would all become rapidly short of RAM. I really like the idea of trying to encapsulate the short "process" which allows us to carry on when faced with a million potentially unresolvable situations per day; like will it rain on my newly washed car to what will I do now my dog has died. These little patches of curative and terminating "gestalts" are the natural haikus if the human psychological condition. My theory and I am sticking to it
The last couplet is all wrong..........it was from a real experience.
Best,
tectak