(adult content, murder) Death's tempted

[Chaotic Body]

mainly, it;s the enjambment that is allowing the piece to be called prose poetry but is that enough, while the content is clear, i'd like to see some use of simile, metaphor, assonance, consonance, etc.
ast present if feels like i'm being told a story
i'm not trying to re write the poem and it's just a rush thing anyway to try and show what i mean;

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A thousand roars of appreciation in the streets
A great reshuffling of power
Men with knowledge of law line up to patch things up
History repeats itself, the world rolling one turn

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A thousand rolling roars, the street rumbles
power re birthed
lawmakers lay with lambs
History's phoenix, slaughtered again.

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just an idea to get the juices flowing.

titles are always good

billy

Wow that's so awesome !

I'm telling myself to stay really objective, I think this is key to the effect?
But yeah I want to have contrasting verses that's pretty cool..

I have no idea what to call it haha!
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I have a new version up anyway

Also, just because why not, I release my poems/stories into the public domain