(adult content, murder) Death's tempted

[Aish]

Head rattles inhumanly, manically, eyes on the target I am having an immediate problem with your opening strophe, and especially with your opening line. While 'manically' is not a word, and maniacally would be a suggestion to consider, 'inhumanly' does not compute for me. To stalk prey, be it a rival, for sport, or retaliation, seems all too human. The ability to murder would seem to be on the level of physiological needs/primal instincts/basal anger/survival. Anything operating from this mechanism could be taken a hundred different directions starting from sociopathalogical, but inhuman it is not. Most religious systems all have murderous inclinations as a humanistic failing to be avoided.
A gleeful shriek is let out half-accidentally
He rubs his hands together frantically
It's almost time


The target is a man his early 40s
Aggravated, thrusts down a cell phone onto the high-rise office floor
Turns to the window in a ritual like fashion as he sighs
A long last breath, ended by the sniper


A thousand roars of appreciation in the streets The focus shifted here. I am not sure it shifted clearly.
A great reshuffling of power
Men with knowledge of law line up to patch things up
History repeats itself, the world rolling one turn


But none of those deaths in the street, in the ghettoes
None are as sweet as the all-too-ready betrayal of such important men
Death dips his long teeth into his new meat, scrapes the sweetness out
Mankind has been fooled again.

Your penultimate strophe seems out of place to me. Your final strophe could be developed into a piece of its own, and would be more effective in my opinion.


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I want to know what this means! But I am trying to be pretty clear

some man of power (common theme) is thrust into depreciation (e.g. Kony)
rioting and prejudice and killing, (common theme)

Death is personified, first you may think the sniper refers to the first verse but that's not so

Death getting his fix, working hard to create such a perfect composition or result that in human terms would be 'beautiful', is what I am playing with

All criticism welcomed & appreciated

Even as a study in the personification of death this really falls short for me. After several readings I don't find myself viewing the scene you painted with any emotion/acumin whatsoever.