04-13-2012, 04:11 AM
Where is Fritz Pearls when you need him, that chain smoking little hobgoblin!
A nice juxtaposition of the poetic and the objective comment lines, despite the fact that it weakens the poem. This has great limbs, but the body appears dead. Definitely some great lines here, mostly the first line of each pair.
If I had to pick one
"Body imperfect strains to pace that part of me which youth recalls."
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This one is particularly funny
"I am saddenened by the plight of others, crying tears of empathy."
Of course I don't know what the word "saddenened" means.
Interesting reference to Paul at the beginning, although I am not sure what it has to do with...
Dale
A nice juxtaposition of the poetic and the objective comment lines, despite the fact that it weakens the poem. This has great limbs, but the body appears dead. Definitely some great lines here, mostly the first line of each pair.
If I had to pick one
"Body imperfect strains to pace that part of me which youth recalls."
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This one is particularly funny
"I am saddenened by the plight of others, crying tears of empathy."
Of course I don't know what the word "saddenened" means.
Interesting reference to Paul at the beginning, although I am not sure what it has to do with...
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.