04-04-2012, 08:32 AM
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What they mean, is that there is no main verb to pull the thing to-gether, so that it might read as a sentence. Of course there are verbs aplenty there, in different forms, or hidden in parenthesis, or clauses, but not that . Philatone's suggestion should explain.
I agree with Philatone about the throbbing and waiting. As for the cage business, I would have liked you to add 'bones' to the spine, which would sort that, and refer back to the 'bones' earlier on. Also --'wide-boy'? In 2012?
What they mean, is that there is no main verb to pull the thing to-gether, so that it might read as a sentence. Of course there are verbs aplenty there, in different forms, or hidden in parenthesis, or clauses, but not that . Philatone's suggestion should explain.
I agree with Philatone about the throbbing and waiting. As for the cage business, I would have liked you to add 'bones' to the spine, which would sort that, and refer back to the 'bones' earlier on. Also --'wide-boy'? In 2012?