~Fallen~

[Fug-azi]

Appreciate the insight and most I'd agree with, the stanza you say about requiring a verb, it does have "nursing", "inhale", "tied" etc so I'm a bit confused by your response.

Agree with the dash, should be "half-moon"

Would adding "rib" to the stanza ie ;
and I found I could climb
the ladder of her spine, though her heart
had escaped that ribcage long ago,
all I could see was my dignity
lying discarded on an unmade bed,

Would be interested to hear more of your thoughts.

Cheers