Metempsychosis

[Philatone]

hello, aish!

most of my comments are biased towards my personal style and a lack of a firm grasp on the material; take what you will!

Vintage eschara,
with pin-hole star mouths ...maybe includes one more adjective than I would like normally
and wormy tongues

bore ...was not a fan of the single line for this. also, played with making this present tense to make it more immediate
through reinforced hulls
and calcified pollution.....like the images i'm getting, especially the "hulls" --great choice. I did want "pollution" to be a little more specific and concrete, though the "calcified" does make it seem more tangible. I like how you display the power of these tiny creatures

Phoneme linked pheromones, ...initially read this as "phoneme-linked", where "phoneme" is an adjective. overall, this stanza leaves me puzzled. I'm having trouble placing the "center"; center of the creatures? the ship? something more religious (as suggested by the title)?
hot and naked in the center.

Vintage eschara,
with pin-hole star mouths
and wormy tongues; ...the repetition makes this chant-like. i'm imagining a witch's spell almost. also suggests a cycle

the entombed are alive. ...seems somewhat open. I took it as either these eschara inside of a sunken vessel or perhaps the ship just sunk, and the people are drowning. regardless, the words given lend it a sinister quality
Alive,
and wicked ...for me, dropping the "and" adds a bit of impact for the ending
and dreaming...

i apologize because i am sure i'm way off base. regardless, i hope this can help