03-24-2012, 05:24 PM
i saw a couple of of meter lines (to my mind) and Leanne already pointed them out in the 1st sonnet so i won't, apart from;
while Strether enters a state of sexless stasis felt like it had too syls or two feet over.
Eager to serve, but heedless in his hurry,
he bombed a well, blew some frogs ker-flooey-
doing in the well, as well. Whereat the Arnewi
sent him off to visit Where The Fug Are We?
As Rain King, Hendy made water for a nation;
and so, they gave him fifty wives to service.
But one Fugggy custom made him nervous-
failure to perform meant strangulation.
felt the the meter was up and down as did a couple of other places throughout the set. that said i loved em, i'm academically challenged even for the uk and know less than i should of american lit; while some of the context may escape me (though i did get fenimore cooper in the last one ( saw his name didn't i
) ) i still enjoyed the humour of them. some good narratives.
while Strether enters a state of sexless stasis felt like it had too syls or two feet over.
Eager to serve, but heedless in his hurry,
he bombed a well, blew some frogs ker-flooey-
doing in the well, as well. Whereat the Arnewi
sent him off to visit Where The Fug Are We?
As Rain King, Hendy made water for a nation;
and so, they gave him fifty wives to service.
But one Fugggy custom made him nervous-
failure to perform meant strangulation.
felt the the meter was up and down as did a couple of other places throughout the set. that said i loved em, i'm academically challenged even for the uk and know less than i should of american lit; while some of the context may escape me (though i did get fenimore cooper in the last one ( saw his name didn't i
) ) i still enjoyed the humour of them. some good narratives.