Dresden

[billy]

Dresden


When the flowers bloom in Dresden starts off well for me
and the smoke clears in Iraq this line enhances the start and lends some depth
when the snow melts in Korea again; a re-enforcement to the 1st 2 lines.
and the ferryman shows the way for me [b]this is where the poem begins to fall away[/b]
perhaps the stars will shine again,
and the sun, come out to play this line undoes the good work of the 1st 3 lines.

hi rob,
it started off on a hi note and then lost the initial opening as it went a little off course. that said, i think you have enough content to do a reasonably small edit in order to recover the piece.

thanks for the read.