(03-21-2012, 05:09 AM)Roy Hobbs Wrote: Sedulous in full aesthetic dress,my problem is with ivory can, while they were called ivory canes, they were, are ivory handled canes.
Dorian Gray pursed his lips,
(those chiseled in excellent disdain)
posed his ivory cane
aslant the wrought-iron gate.
In dandy style announced,
with a doily at his nose,
“Oscar, I'm getting younger,
but the portrait I've lived
has finished too late."
rh
unlike the multitude i like the idea of a doily for a snotrag, (true story coming up); i had a friend whose aunt we would visit (cakes and cola).
she served everything on chintz plates and in chintz cups set on lace doilies. she had the habit of plucking a doily from the portable trolly and wiping my frineds nose with it, he hated it but it was worth it for the goodies...so i'm for the doily dabber.
the last 3 lines were for me excellent, mainly the getting younger part and complaining about it. if i had a nit it would be that the 1st line feels more akin to an oscar poem than a dorian. jmo
great to see your poetry roy and thanks for the read.