03-22-2012, 11:34 AM
apart from not knowing what the core is or the absence of command, i enjoyed it.
i enjoyed it a lot
it had a great lilting feel to it and the sonnet form was visible; the iambics and line structure automatically made me think sonnet, as did the end rhymes. sadly i wouldn't have seen the conachlonnic side of it unless it was pointed out to me...that said i'm not well versed in the form as anyone who ever read the one i did will testify
apart from my ignorance of the two things mentioned, i saw nothing in need of a fix.
thanks for the read.
i enjoyed it a lot
it had a great lilting feel to it and the sonnet form was visible; the iambics and line structure automatically made me think sonnet, as did the end rhymes. sadly i wouldn't have seen the conachlonnic side of it unless it was pointed out to me...that said i'm not well versed in the form as anyone who ever read the one i did will testify
apart from my ignorance of the two things mentioned, i saw nothing in need of a fix.
thanks for the read.