Hercynian

[Philatone]

agree, the idea is perfect I think, and I don't necessarily have a problem with the couplets. if anything, I feel as though I'm lacking depth. there is so much happening in the piece: the forest, the unrevealed relationship between the forest and the speaker, and the speaker's own condition, yet I didn't get enough from any of the forces to get as attached as I would have liked. it's probably a personal thing, but that is why i'm so hesitant with this work. it is something what I contend with the most in my own pieces; is there enough substance? with meter, I think it becomes slightly easier for something to be missing

again, just my own take