at the artisan's

[billy]

i could love this a whole lot more if the enjambment worked better,

ie;
the woman I will marry
guides me towards portraits
with eyes as vacant as seashells
in another room. I think the wall

does she have vacant eyes? would the last line end better at think? just a couple of suggestions.
i like the words you've laid down, i'm just not buzzed by the order, (of course this could be a fault of me the reader)
i don't think it would take a large edit to tweak it a little.
out of all of it i think the last stanza is the best.

thanks for the read