Hercynian

[billy]

Hercynian* Silva from far above, I see i know what Hercyniam means but not what Silva means. i did a google and got mainly compasses.
the mountainous terrain of Germany
and I imagine you were, as before
from those mountains you were shorn. i think you just made it with before and shorn
When Rome could only stand at your feet
pretending you it did defeat, feels a bit forced to fit the rhyme
and there is nothing that I hold so dear
as knowing you taught Rome to fear.
Yet time it seems can defeat all foes,
just as it heals all ills and woes.
I regret I’ll never walk again,
through Black Forested, wood dense land.
Nor e’er again be battered by the Rhine,
where I left my flesh behind.
My heart there also was meant to be, feels forced
so my spirit could fly free.

©2012 ~Erthona



* Pronounced like Hey-sin-ee-ah: A primeval forest, the remains of which is the Black Forest.

The form: This is written in accentual verse with alternating lines of five and four feet ending in rhyming couplets.

apart from the two nits of something feeling forced i really enjoyed the piece.

Nor e’er again be battered by the Rhine, was my fave line though was it meant to rhyme with land? it feels like you really did see it in times passed as you flew over the flow was good as was the narrative. i did get an impression that you were going back to some kind of connection which for me added to the piece in making it real.

thanks for the read.