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[tectak]

I can't deny that I at least derived from tectak's comment that he doesn't like my closing line, which is feedback in itself. My problem was that his comment seemed less like advice and more like a demand.
Summation lines are my heroin. I've been struggling with them for years. I hate them in other people's poems, but when it comes to my own I often find it hard to not wrap them in a pretty pink bow at the end.
I will remove the closing line. Thanks, Ray. I didn't even consciously register that the closing line was a summation until I read your comment

A result then
Best,
Tectak
PS It did sound like a demand. Right out of character for me. That is how the last line affected my judgement. In my defense, I can only say that we all, and I mean all those who "bother" at all, do make a contractual offer when putting forward a critique. It really is up to the poet to decide whether to accept the terms. Sorry. Billy, I will stop now. Wrong place for this.