i used a lot of the suggestions from the feedback given because it made a lot of sense for me. i did leave a bit out, i personally like the misspelling of similes. (though i could be wrong) i changed it to bitches in heat then changed it back to on heat and add an hyphen making it on-heat, thanks to everyone for their input.
I leap straight into metaphor
like a lemming into space.
Words fly and land;
splat! Flat, against a pixellated net.
My similis are oft' misspelt
unkempt; they're not dyslexic
but hectic wrote. No time to scratch
my scrote that itches
burning like an on-heat bitch,
hidden inside my pen.
I leap straight into metaphor
like a lemming into space.
Words fly and land;
splat! Flat, against a pixellated net.
My similis are oft' misspelt
unkempt; they're not dyslexic
but hectic wrote. No time to scratch
my scrote that itches
burning like an on-heat bitch,
hidden inside my pen.
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The Heat
I jump into metaphor
like a lemming into space.
Words fly and land; splat
flat against a pixelated net.
My similis are oft' misspelt
and unkempt, not dyslexic
but hectic wrote. No time to scratch
my scroat that itches, like
some on heat bitches
hidden in my pen.