The Final Hour

[Erthona]

Jack,

Thanks for the read and the comments.

"Would this line flow better if "loving" and "look" changed places?" Maybe, but I think the iambic is already tortured enough

The line "Or is it true, what is said of the flesh?" refers to what comes after, and it is more rhetorical than anything, in order to set up the final question.

"wizened sack" is the skin of the body as it begins to dry with age.

Thanks again Jack,

Dale
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Ed,

I wrote a fairly substantial reply to your comments, but it seems it has vanished. A brief recap.

"one such as I" is an allusion to the song "fool such as I". while it can be debated if it is grammatical or not (although I think that is more of a stylistic judgement), the meaning is still clear.

I lay, for I wish not to lie, in that I prefer honesty over grammar. That is to say, either lay or lie can be seen ambiguously, but for reasons other than that, it should be "lie".

Thanks for the critiques guys,

Dale