03-05-2012, 10:13 PM
tec-
thanks for the time as always. some of the line breaks do have more to them than randomness, I assure you. Usually when reading, I'm more guided by punctuation first, then line breaks if I can't make sense of it. Yet I do agree, some of the lines could be extended. I hope to have a revision up in a few hours.
I thought I could bring in the chair from association with a hotel room, but perhaps it was too much of a stretch. I'll see what I can add
thanks for the time as always. some of the line breaks do have more to them than randomness, I assure you. Usually when reading, I'm more guided by punctuation first, then line breaks if I can't make sense of it. Yet I do agree, some of the lines could be extended. I hope to have a revision up in a few hours.
I thought I could bring in the chair from association with a hotel room, but perhaps it was too much of a stretch. I'll see what I can add
Written only for you to consider.