So Kind

[Philatone]

dale

I apologize for not having gotten to this sooner; it's been some time since I got to a piece of yours, and you've been generous enough to touch my own works so rapidly. having said that:

I haven't seen the critiques, so if I repeat...then, maybe that just reinforces. and if I don't, then I'm probably just the only crazy one

I can’t say that she was being unkind,
when she separated out, ...debated removing the "out" as well as the comma
what was hers,
from… what was mine. ...I get the ellipsis. it gives that dramatic touch. But, that doesn't mean I agree with using it--I'm not convinced it is necessary, but that is a personal feeling. regarding the rest of the stanza, I think the tone is great, the word choice ideal, the subject matter touching because of its familiarity. I'm not sure how I feel about it yet, but there are so many monosyllabic words that it does create a specific feel; sometimes, I felt like breaking it would not be a bad thing. (interesting, "separated" is one of the few with multiple syllables)
Justice is the best hoped for—
there’s no room for mercy
—when what was loved,
is now abhorred. ...personally, I did not get much from these four lines. The first bit had concreteness, the last stanza had reflection, this one offers...more reflection? telling? again, probably is entirely my own sentiment.
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It is unfair, though no less true,
we pay for what we chose to do.
Consciously intended or not, ...I wasn't sure how much "consciously" is needed after a word like "intend," though I'm sure that opens up a debate
we pay for all the sins that we’ve forgot. ..like the idea. note: I was expecting the standard past participle instead of "forgot"

I did like the read, Erthona. hope this can help