What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 4)

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What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 4)

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03-03-2012, 05:32 AM

Hi again Geoff,

Thanks for coming back. It's these small tweaks that I think give a piece a chance to go somewhere.

I have a fix in mind for the fishermen (which I'll do shortly).

Smooth path admittingly could be better. I agree with you. It feels placeholderish.

I'll give the repetition of word some thought.

Thanks again.

Best,

Todd

The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson

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What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 4) - by Todd - 02-28-2012, 09:12 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me - by popeye - 02-28-2012, 10:18 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me - by Philatone - 02-28-2012, 11:57 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me - by tectak - 02-28-2012, 04:57 PM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me - by Todd - 02-29-2012, 01:10 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me - by tectak - 02-29-2012, 03:52 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me - by tectak - 03-07-2012, 08:48 PM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me - by Todd - 02-29-2012, 04:00 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me (Revision) - by Wildcard - 02-29-2012, 12:58 PM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me (Revision) - by Todd - 02-29-2012, 01:39 PM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me (Revision) - by Philatone - 03-03-2012, 04:51 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me (Revision) - by Todd - 03-03-2012, 05:32 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me (Revision 2) - by Todd - 03-03-2012, 07:47 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me (Revision 2) - by Philatone - 03-03-2012, 08:40 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me (Revision 2) - by Todd - 03-03-2012, 01:30 PM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me (Revision 2) - by Philatone - 03-03-2012, 02:03 PM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me (Revision 2) - by tectak - 03-04-2012, 04:13 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Me (Revision 2) - by Todd - 03-04-2012, 04:38 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 3) - by Todd - 03-06-2012, 12:29 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 3) - by Philatone - 03-06-2012, 04:25 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 3) - by tectak - 03-06-2012, 04:59 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 3) - by tectak - 03-06-2012, 05:22 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 3) - by Todd - 03-06-2012, 05:00 AM

RE: What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 3) - by Todd - 03-08-2012, 02:17 PM

RE: What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 3) - by tectak - 03-08-2012, 04:36 PM

RE: What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 3) - by billy - 03-08-2012, 04:48 PM

RE: What the Storm Taught Us (Revision 3) - by Todd - 03-09-2012, 09:53 AM

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