02-27-2012, 11:11 AM
Your writing has advanced nicely since last I read your stuff months ago.
most nits have been pointed out already,
but I am going to stress that "god" is always better implied... for me anyway, others may feel differently.

most nits have been pointed out already,
but I am going to stress that "god" is always better implied... for me anyway, others may feel differently.


