02-26-2012, 06:26 AM
Geoff,
Thanks for your input. I think you are right about the rhymes running the show. I may have to just completely start over here. Thanks for your time (I just saw this
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Tectak,
Everything you said is fair. Thanks for your time, I will just scrap it and try the idea again without rhyme at all. I hope it's better than this one.
I hope you guys don't feel like I'm wasting your time with my rubbish, but I don't post all of my stuff, just those that I think have promise. It's hard to see the promise of this one probably, but I think I do.
It's a really sick story.
Thanks for your input. I think you are right about the rhymes running the show. I may have to just completely start over here. Thanks for your time (I just saw this
)Tectak,
Everything you said is fair. Thanks for your time, I will just scrap it and try the idea again without rhyme at all. I hope it's better than this one.
I hope you guys don't feel like I'm wasting your time with my rubbish, but I don't post all of my stuff, just those that I think have promise. It's hard to see the promise of this one probably, but I think I do.
It's a really sick story.