Dress Code
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Hi Geoff,

I'm reading along loving this poem and then I get to the last two stanzas and I can't figure out what is happening. Huh I know it's probably just my inexperience in reading poetry, but until that point I'm getting a story about a child that gets stung on the eye at school interlaced with a subtext of uniforms not performing their intended purpose (a very washed down version of your much more elegant theme, sorry Blush ) and then suddenly:

Quote:You shed
and returned them to their owners
when your eye opened,

and it stained
the only shirts
they ever wore to school
that year.

'Shed' - Takes off the uniform? Like breaking a yolk?
'returned them to their owners' - the school? the man?

and then the eye opens and stains the uniform?

The thing is, if it wasn't an intriguing and well-written poem I wouldn't care so much, which speaks of your considerable skill. I just don't get the last two stanzas of this one Sad

Thanks for sharing.
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Messages In This Thread
Dress Code - by Philatone - 02-22-2012, 02:45 PM
RE: Dress Code - by Leanne - 02-22-2012, 02:56 PM
RE: Dress Code - by popeye - 02-22-2012, 03:39 PM
RE: Dress Code - by rayheinrich - 02-22-2012, 04:36 PM
RE: Dress Code - by Erthona - 02-22-2012, 08:10 PM
RE: Dress Code - by tectak - 02-22-2012, 10:00 PM
RE: Dress Code - by Wildcard - 02-23-2012, 06:35 AM
RE: Dress Code - by Philatone - 02-23-2012, 09:53 AM
RE: Dress Code - by Philatone - 02-23-2012, 12:46 PM
RE: Dress Code - by rayheinrich - 02-23-2012, 01:40 PM
RE: Dress Code - by Philatone - 02-23-2012, 03:14 PM
RE: Dress Code - by rayheinrich - 02-24-2012, 06:38 AM



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