02-12-2012, 03:17 PM
Mark,
This isn't bad. There are a couple of line burps here and there, but with the TV singing at me it makes it difficult to concentrate enough to list them and offer suggestions.
"His face hinted that he must know
and no one could knowingly know."
"know" and "know" is not a rhyme.
Dale
This isn't bad. There are a couple of line burps here and there, but with the TV singing at me it makes it difficult to concentrate enough to list them and offer suggestions.
"His face hinted that he must know
and no one could knowingly know."
"know" and "know" is not a rhyme.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.