The Love Song of Burke and Wills

[billy]

this one is hard for me to give fair comment because i too, know not the story. but that said, it's still writing so i'll comment on that.

the poem has to be austrailia, or a zoo with roos. so i'm sure it's about a subject on or in auz. which helps me as the reader.
the 2nd stanza was for me the best. the sand becomes alive, an actual entity.

the dry skin crackling stanza works really well in letting me know what was going on with its good image.

the lizard stanza brings us the death and the last an epitaph, i changed my mind, i like the last two stanza best.

i can't really comment on how to improve the story or poem, it was a good read and had a fair few universal images. for me these were what brought some of the bacon home.

thanks for the read.