An interesting day when I was seventy-two

[Leanne]

Tectak, fear not, I NEVER go easy in Serious Critique, I genuinely like to see something different. As to line lengths, if all of your poetry is exactly the same in format then I can see how it might get monotonous, but I find this quite an interesting change from regulation stanzas. I would never advocate breaking a line just because that's how a poem "should" look.

I'd probably agree with Erthona that the caps at the start of each line could be done away with, though.