Little Gangsta:

[Philatone]

ey billy

I exercised the old bones
and crawled to the corner shop
today, the entrance was full;...like the line breaks you have used
little arse-biting twelve year olds.
Scruffy cunts all, and cheeky with it.
'Give us a fag you fat cunt.'
'Give us a fiver you old goaty bastard.'
All of them threatening
like yellowed teeth
in a monster's maw. ..like the word choice (maw is great); still deciding on how much I like the image though. I wanted something more specific than "monster"

I took my cig's out and lit one.
'Here,' i said passing it.
Little Mister Pissy said 'Thanks',
then screamed as the hot coal
pierced his lips.
Once he realised what had happened
he stopped howling,
his mates gawking like geese.

The penknife hot-lips pulled out
made me cautiously chuckle....felt a little lost in these 2 lines
I clipped his ear,
and they all traipsed in...really like "traipsed"
behind me, like some kind of grey worm;
while a bought a Daily Star ...think you mean "I" instead of "a"
then wriggled out when i left.

'Oy you! you fucker?'
the worm head shouted...."worm head" wasn't my favorite, but I'm struggling for an alternative
Turning i asked 'What'...not sure all of these details are necessary in this line
'Av you gotta light please'
he begged.

I wasn't fully sure what I was supposed to take away from this; just took it as a critique/ observation of a population. liked the closing line a lot. I did get a little confused in the 3rd stanza opening, which is probably just a poor reading on my end or just my naive nature. sorry i can't be much more helpful beyond that