just got to this. most things have been said already.
the edit works well and the grammar is improved. i did like some of the images in the poem. i enjoyd the 2nd line more than the others, it has an unearthly feel about it.
the leg's draping penultimate stanza was excellent.
at first i thought of noah then i remember the title (titles do have a use don't they) and the letter to the wife became clear.
sorry i haven't given any constructive stuff for you to chew over
the edit works well and the grammar is improved. i did like some of the images in the poem. i enjoyd the 2nd line more than the others, it has an unearthly feel about it.
the leg's draping penultimate stanza was excellent.
at first i thought of noah then i remember the title (titles do have a use don't they) and the letter to the wife became clear.
sorry i haven't given any constructive stuff for you to chew over